Sunday, February 4, 2007

A World Yet Saved Comments

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When | you look at me...
...here's what I see:

a world without hate,
...
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Landrey
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Aura M. 22 February 2007

just a question. do you believe in these words you've written? 'cause i do...

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Jonzo Bandwagoner 06 February 2007

interesting approach here, landrey-I really like it (the 'pause' thing also mixes it up... very nice) ! A reminder of what the sinfulness of mankind w/out Christ looks like to God. Overall, great poem. I want to see that final edition when it's ready!

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Landrey 04 February 2007

fyi the | between the when and you and when and God is a slash not the word/letter 'I' it's simply there to cause the reader to pause. also these verses are completely disconnected. I like the first one a lot and the second one too but I may just have to come back and do some more with the 2nd, maybe write a verse inbetween. thanks for reading, folks. -landrey

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