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It’s scorching hot and your whole family are having fun,
Your bodies tanning as you lie in the sun,
The kids are in the sea and your lying on the golden sand,
And the beer is resting softly in your hand,
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elo James, lol, i really like this poem and think thats it's gr8
You're only 14 and you wrote this? Not bad at all, although I could do without the preachy ending. Now why would you grab the kids and then run into, not out of, the water? Finally, you've got some usage issues (e.g., try to learn when to use 'you're' and 'your') . Keep writing!
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7/18/2025 9:19:52 PM # 1.0.0
Yes, James...Bravo....you hit the nail on the head. What loving family would NOT run into the water to rescue his/her family...this is a great write...you're ahead of your time, James....keep up the writing.... Your Friend, Lare