Tuesday, April 25, 2023

A Woman's Joy Comments

Rating: 4.5

A teenage girl strolling down the street
Looking around the city and it's outskirts
Meditating in the process
She gazes at the sky and smiles
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Gerald Opio
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Bri Edwards 24 May 2023

An unwed teenaged girl and her baby have at least two 'strikes against them' (at least) . I wish them well. : ) bri 4 stars, but try my suggestions. bri ;)

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Bri Edwards 24 May 2023

Her pain is 'alleviated'. Another kid arrives to be dealt with by the world. Good grief! ! ! Hopefully it's a 'good' one. If 'thee' is referring to God, many would capitalize 'Thee'.

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Bri Edwards 24 May 2023

'alleviate ə-lē′vē-āt″ transitive verb To make (pain, for example) less intense or more bearable: synonym: relieve. To lessen or reduce. To lighten or lessen the force or weight of.' I think the mother's anxiety (not the mother) is 'alleviated'.

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Bri Edwards 24 May 2023

'Labor and labour are the same word. Labor is preferred in American English, whereas labour is standard in British English. You can remember to use labour for British audiences by looking at the U in both labour and United Kingdom'

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Bri Edwards 24 May 2023

[[ 'archaic objective case of THOU 1 a —used especially in ecclesiastical or literary language and by Friends especially among themselves ]]

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Bri Edwards 24 May 2023

stanza 2: you 'need to' rework/reword lines 4&5 a little bit; read it to yourself and I think you will agree : ) I'd also rework the latter part of stanza 3, AND... I think watch your punctuation.

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Bri Edwards 24 May 2023

line 6: 'her self' In American English I say most speakers would usually use 'herself', whereas I believe that in UK, India, and other areas, 'herself' would usually be used.

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Bri Edwards 24 May 2023

Re: line 5....I and many others have enough trouble with 'knowng and using' 'modern English'. I think the use of 'thee and thou' in today's world (in general) risks misunerstanding. ;) bri

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Bri Edwards 24 May 2023

'The words 'thee' and 'thou' have the same meaning, which is 'you' in modern-day English. However, 'thee' is used when the 'you' is an object, e.g. 'She sang to thee.'. Whereas 'thou' is used when the 'you' is a subject' (cont.)

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Bri Edwards 24 May 2023

'it's outskirts' 'its' 'It's and its. They're ubiquitous, and ubiquitously confused. In theory, the rule that distinguishes the two is simple: it's means it is or it has.' PLEASE don't ask the definiton of 'ubiquitious'!

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