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I don't think my brain can stand any more alliteration. You take English way too seriously.

...In-ter-est-ing...

funny stuff. ur good... keep it up love the repitition tho: D

i think it sounds funny...a good funny i mean. it's Awesomely Awesome!

Hehehe. I giggled a girly giggle. 'And stole me away from this place Into the watery water. The frigid cold felt like Wet ice cubes.' Here the flow breaks after watery water. Otherwise, I would say that this poem flows fairly nicely due to the repetition of sounds like 'kingly king.' Yup, I like it.

I cracked a smile, and then giggled a little. I like the style here, mostly the repetition, its fun!

oh, Tyler, you crack me up as if I were Humpty Dumpty! ! ! Your (amusing) repetition really does lend a steady rhythm/flow here, which is excellent. It is a bit awkward in places, but since it lends to the humour, it works out all right. This poem, to me, is like the crack-baby of Aesop and Mother Goose with a dash of Lewis Carroll thrown in, and that is verrrrrrrry impressive! ! Do I espy a kingly king of poetry? ? Here's hoping!

I really like it. The repitition is great and it ties the poem together well (at least I think it does) .

dude! i like the repetion, it makes more happy and light! i think this is funny. i like your adjectives!

Just so you all know, I, the author of this poem, purposefully used, with a purpose, the repetitive repetition to make a quite humorous poem. Really, believe me on this. So don't get confused and say, while scratching your head, 'Is this how he really writes? I don't get this.' This is how the poem is meant to be structured.

It had a very good point, but you might be more effective with less repetition you lost me for a bit :) It was very effective and has a good point ;)

Well, hmmm.....this is very interesting! But to say the least I enjoyed reading! ! =]=]

so dying isn't true then....brilliant......John