A Whrillwind Comments

You have established some promising verse here...This piece is really more prosaic than it is poetry, although one could consider it Contemporary Free-Verse which'IS' a form/style of modern poetry. That said, the work is very choppy, and absent of necessary prepositions that would have enabled the piece to flow smoothly...Read it out loud to yourself, and I think you will see what I mean...The piece has potential as do you as a writer...Good Luck, Fatima. ~FjR-'16~

What a lively dream you have put in words! If you don't mind I 'd suggest to use full words instead of the only letters that we use in text messages. It will give your poems more beauty.