A Vampiric's Lust Comments

I really like the tone of this poem specially the first 6 lines...It's very convincing and a shocking truth hides in the words with a surprise. This style of writing poetry is a lot like mine but yours is only a little more Ingenuous... this is very impressive and well fitted with the context...keep it up!

This poem reminds me of Twilight {a novel 4 those who don't know}, and that's a good thing because i LOVE Twilight: D Cheers, (je l'adore!) H&K's ~Jess~<33

Nice job on this poem keep up the good work cb

love the last line n the rythm of the poem! ! =]

love the last line n the rythm of the poem! ! =]

The immortality i declare is not the answer so beware.........thought provoking line...You talked about freedom about doing little things that makes one happy, you talked about immortality in which you only have it in your mind? hhhmmm nice irony when there's no absolution in the end...10

I like the imagery as well as the freedom of the rhyme scheme. Good job!

An interesting little story. There are a few misspelled words. Be sure and reread the piece again. Again, a nice piece of prose to begin. GW62

I really loved it, I like this style! Keep it!