A Vampire’s Dilemma Comments

A good write, well done

dilemma well brought out.. powerful words..

Hell! This is a love triangle Bare bodies of deceit Surround a soul elite................wonderful dilemma.........Good Write............

sleeping in daylight and hoping to live by the darkness of night...well, many human minds are vampire like...artful poetization of the theme inside...10

very strong verses I may say it is a love dilemma and with the line breadcrumbs lead to nowhere is the right words to describe how we feel lost and hopeless sometimes..

I particularly enjoyed the image of the 'Sublime realities' dawning. For me the poem is about an insomniac, who starts having hallucinations, heads off to sleep, catches bits of sleep here and there and hopes to feel the sweet release of sleep. I could be wrong but thats my interpretation. Your style seems a little abrupt, each line is about a different subject matter rather than expanding on the line before it, not that thats a bad thing. Good stuff

A complex but enjoyable poem...Well done Jathin, Sid.

A very innovative poem, well penned, 10 Lynda x

I really enjoyed reading this. Great job. Thanks for sharing.

very creative, imaginative...a different theme...

one more day to hope......lovely. very nice and imaginative poem. keep up the good work. take care

wowwwwwwww the virgin silence succumbs beautiful phrases and great imagery -10 anjali

nice flow... very njoying is the way u hv written it down... :)

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Whoever said a vampyre does not dream? Kindov sick of the vampyre movement personally, but this was good after it's fashion. I liked the imagery regarding the bubble the most. It was well said.

Nice poem, very creative!

nice poem i like it its very expressive and shows alot

Nice poem. Very to the point.

I luv it what messages you are sending? I dont get it its was great 8+ its kind of scared and mystery

Based on words alone I give this poem a 10 for rhythm and rhyme. I enjoyed the flow. Yet, I'm not too sure on what message you are trying to portray with this vampire. Perhaps if you put more detail of the internal conflicts of this vampire, I would understand this a bit better. Over all though, great job! Be Different. Be You. Elizabeth