Tuesday, October 16, 2007

A Urinary Calculi Comments

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Urine is a yellowish liquid sample tissue,
rinses the body system off its dirt residue.
insoluble wastes accumulating which are toxic,
nauseates our senses making us feel very sick;
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Marvin Brato Sr
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Janice Windle 25 October 2007

How clever to write a poem on such an unusual theme, Marvin! The acrostic form (? is that the word) makes it interesting to read, but read aloud in the right tone this would also make fascinating listening. Good one! x Jan

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Alison Cassidy 17 October 2007

Marvin, I've just twigged about the first letter of each line. So clever and what a fascinating subject for a poem, too. I gather you have personal experience of kidney stones - either as someone inflicted with them or (more likley) as one who looks after people so afflicted. I'm told the pain is the equivalent of childbirth! YUK! Great piece of poetic anatomy. love, Allie xxxx

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Meggie Gultiano 16 October 2007

I can relate to this, Marvin..that's why i will be having a surgery this month..I know this is your profession and i thank you for sharing this not only to me but also for the other readers as well. take care hugs, Meggie

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Marvin Brato Sr

Marvin Brato Sr

Davao City, Philippines
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