A Tree I Am Comments
I look at you
In pure amazement
Like a tree
I stand in silence
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Bharati, It seems your supply of punctuatiom marks is depleted! At least you are consistent in using none that I see. bri : ) In this poem it did NOT bother me.
STANZA 2, LINE 1: 'I enliven' Would 'I awaken' or 'I come alive' fit as well or better? To me they do. :
"We breathe together"…I love that line! Glad you made the change! Good thing Bri Edwards is breathing too!
Emotions run deep! ! ! Motions of love and life. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
A moment of unity, where life merges with love and wisdom. Very nice poem
Your poems have a fine touch of feelings that come from deep within, this one is no exception, I enjoyed reading it.
My hearty thanks Aniruddha Pathak ji for your appreciation.It is a pleasure to read your valuable comments.
I like this overall, Bharati. A question on this one—could you liken your emotions to something other than an ocean? Except for that, the tree image is consistent in the poem. Hoping you’re well in all ways, Glen
Thank you Glen Kappy for coming to read my poems and your wonderful comments.I am happy that you like the poem.I also like your suggestion and made a small change, that was in my draft poem.I replaced 'My emotions run deep' in the place 'my emotions are like an ocean'.I hope you will like it.
2 - i guess " You" , " you" , & YOU are both people. Overall i like this quite a bit. to MyPoemList. bri :)
1 - " We exchange breathe" maybe you meant " breath" ? Poet Poet uses breath in comment. Either one sounds a bit odd to me. :) how about 'greetings'? I assume " And murmurs the wind" is a poetic way of saying " And the wind murmurs" . if so, i like it. if not, i don't 'get it' aka understand it. ;) :) I'd like more than the ONE punctuation mark, and i'm not sure if you ARE a tree or a person.
Yes, your suggestions are most welcome.I had submitted this poem for an Anthology 'Circular Whispers ' which was published with some edits.My idea was about the relation between human and trees and how tthey complement each other.
'Inside me I am flowering'......... A moment of fulfillment is beautifully presented! Though silent and without words, emotions of gladness run deep inside and there is a feel of sedate contentment in the whole poem! Smooth narration!
Thank you Madam Valsa George for such a beautiful comment.Yes, it is about a moment of fulfillment.
We exchange breath When song birds sing And murmurs the wind. just wonderful I also composed a poem WEA RE TREES LIFE IS SIMPLE LIKE THE FLOWING WINDY BREEZE WE LOVE LIKE DO TREES
Thank you Poet Poet for liking my poem on tree and your encouraging words.
You have so wonderfully delineated yourself as a tree having thrilling expression with nice penmanship. This is really a beautiful metaphorical poem with lofty theme.The power of silence and tolerance is well executed here.10
Thank you Sir for your kind comment.I am glad and feel so grateful to you for valuable feedback on many of my poems.
What a lovely metaphor used here to show the impact of love in life. Thanks, Bharati ji.
Thank you Rajnish Mangaji for your kind read and appreciative comment on my poem.
Yes, your poems are warm and touching as this one, I always enjoy your style, your heart is expressed so eloquently in this poem! ! Great poem!
Many thanks Bill Cantrell for your wonerful words of appreciation..
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I see i was here a few years ago. This poem is also in your (and Daniel Brick's) book of poems, Poetry and Friendship. BUT I see no mention of friend/friendship in ANY of the poems' titles! AND I don't recall a menton of friends in your poems.
Hi Bri, Thank you for your observation after reading poems from the book 'Poetry and Friendship' jointly written by Daniel Brick and me.(Part-1)
(Part-2) Our initial plan was to put Daniel Brick's poem and my corresponding poem side by side and Daniel Brick would have provided some insight into chosing the related poems.That could not be, because Daniel Brick died even before chosing complete list.
(Part-3) Initially I was in a dilemma whether to publish the book and sought permission from his son Ryan through PoemHunter message box.Since no reply came after waiting a long time I decided to publish the book.
(Part-4) You can see some poems written by Daniel Brick were meant for his friend Paul, his Persian friend Baharak Barzin and also for me.