Tuesday, September 8, 2009

A Transition Comments

Rating: 5.0

Planted seed, baby rose,
Help me heal and help me grow.
Watered seed, budding rose,
Build me up, flesh and bone.
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Floyd Zimmerman
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Maria Barbara Korynt 16 September 2009

Fine writing, great sensitivity, interesting subject matter. Very much I like it. It is worthwhile to read. (10 v.) Greetings. Maria Barbara Korynt

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Obinna Eruchie 13 September 2009

Beautiful on the stages of life.

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Angelic Warrior 12 September 2009

passionately brilliant! ....break down the walls it the only way you can love.....like the way it flows....changing by each step......beautiful! 10++

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Young One 12 September 2009

i like how you went through the stages, beautifully written, i love this piece. good job.

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Paul Hansford 12 September 2009

A nice transition, and another interesting use of assonance, with the one different rhyme at the beginning.

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Philosophy of a DewyFlower 09 September 2009

a beautiful transition dear Floyd just like the beauty of each flower! Planted-> Watered-> Flowering ============> a beautiful life cycle keep being a flowering FLOWER never be a wilting FLOWER the burn of your Passion FLOWER is a source of your power 10 for the life cycle

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John Knight 09 September 2009

Hi Floyd - this poem is a challenge to us all. We are all on a growth curve from the cradle to the grave - some cope better than others. We feel hemmed in as in a 'cell' a 'tomb' a 'womb' imprisoned - dead - unborn! Verse two is more optimistic - planted - healed - watered - growing - built up - flowering - blooming - willing to learn. Life can be confusing there are walls around our souls which can be torn down by love - by life - by liberty. It often takes another individual - someone who has passion and fire to lift us up on to higher ground. A challenging poem - thanks for sharing - MAX!

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Jen Capaldi 08 September 2009

an elegantly written love poem with so much emotion seeping out of it i can feel your affections. a wonderful creative poem and the last two lines are absolutely beautiful. Jen

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