A Stretch In The Park Comments

I think, you really got the most amazing rhythm, , , everybody can see it with this peace of you.... image already a fan.

a park come alive in words of freshness and natural hues......................lovely

A lovely stroll through the worlds of Victoriana and contemporary combined. I really loved the visions I saw. Bravo fine poet. Karen

it's so lively and lovely :)

a lovely description of a park and you have employed wonderful imagery of birds and flowers to help the reader make a mental picture of the place and rhymes are impressive as it's a discriminating quality of your poetry.

very vivid and colourful..read mine some time..

quite a good poem! you capture the scene in little snippets. I like some of your rhymes, the whole is very inventive and fresh.

perfect happenings in the park. lovely 1.

joy in sights, sounds beautifully expressed in short stanzas.10 Mamta

The imagery succeeds here, stanzaic pattern is good.10

well penned.......trust me, listen to alison.......she is always rite and has showed me the way all the time...........

You have shared some delightful images in this poem Saadat, and there are some wonderful witty touches too, but I wonder if your percussive rhyming pattern isn't just too obvious for such a gentle pastoral piece. Rhyming is certainly an important poetic device and can be very pleasing on the ear, but it is possible to rhyme for rhyme's sake, rather than use rhyming to add color and light to your ideas and images. I don't mean to be harsh, just helpful. You obviously have a fine poetic talent. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

It is a beautiful pastel, full of superb epithets. Continues to write 10++

nature's song written in a great rhyming..............stunning stretch you have painted here.......10

Lots of wonderful imagery, all abounding with a great command of rhythm and rhyme. Flowers, birds, lovers, ladies and even elves all take part in this happily alive beautiful park. 10 Karin Anderson