This is a story of a boy
A small little chap
Born in a village
On India’s map
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Depicting a normal third world offspring in a provoking rhyme is a difficult task yet you worked it out well.thanks for elaborating so simple
Beautiful composition Preetam. liked the flow of verses. simple, yet evoking....
A good story in very smooth verses. The rhymes ending in 'ap' make it a very original poem You got from me a big clap.
Poignant story told with utter simplicity and flowing pathos. I liked it very much rated 9/10. Preetam, you are very talented. Thanks for the invite.
There is a touch of rap about the poem-to use a pun! .The repetition of words ending in -ap in the rhyming scheme turns out to be more effective than I thought. It's a serious poem disguised in simple language.10.
A lifes story. Truly heart felt. Loved the rhythym, Excellent!
Tragic and poignant story told, truly. But prose chopped into dimeters/ trimeters and such and rigidly rhymed is not poetry as heightened language it is a poetry of form. This is fine, but, at least, punctuate such a style carefully. This will be counterpoint to the structural rigidity you impose and contribute a dramatic tension to the read. See Dylan Thomas' 'Poem in October' for this play of rigid stanzaic structure and punctuation. yrs, ab
Beautifuly rhymed........... Sooooo beautifuly written........... Great job done