I can't take it anymore,
I can't stand this mess.
I need to find a way out,
Of this never ending stress.
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Nice concept. There is virtue in allowing issues to take their courses. Please spell-check the poem
A very deep write Roshana with a good flow, life was made for living, live it to the full it can be a short journey.
Wow.... you're young and a promising writer.... I also invite you to see my HEARTACHES WILL NEVER LAST, LIVE ANOTHER NEW DAY, and EACH PASSING DAY.... a big 10 for you, Roshana...
A very powerful piece with strong emotive concepts that make it easy to relate to. I think just a few tiny tweaks on the grammar and maybe a couple of word swaps would add finesse and really drive it home nicely.
Thank you Georgina Murray and with the help of you i'll gladly like my poem to be the best it can be
I live your rhyming pattern. Its amazing. You are a slave of your mind. Break the shackles and see where you rise. Nice read.
IM not sure if this was intended, but I enjoy the slow increase of intensity in the poem. The concept is great as well (Though I'm not sure I should be saying that considering the subject) I like this poem!
thank you Joshua flores