Saturday, July 28, 2007

'A Small Boys Desire' Pt. Iii (Short Story) Comments

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I land in the snow and roll down a small hill. When I reach the bottom I brush the snow off of me and run towards the other kids playing.

It seems as if I get there just in time. They are about to pick sides for a game of war with snowballs. Out of breath I ask, “Can I play”. “Of course”, they shout.
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Sophia White 22 August 2007

You got me! Surprise ending! Nicely done. I never knew you to be so descriptive! I loved it.

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Landrey 06 August 2007

I really liked the ending. makes me want to have some snow though. -landrey

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Patricia Gale 28 July 2007

Such a delightful story, dreaming of the child that still lies within us! Wonderful piece

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