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there's the sea there's the sky the moon and the wind too a picture perfect setting for you and i but you aren't you i'm not i inheritors of the promordial fire we're just the carriers of the principle that governs nature - - - - - - - -A wonderful poem of love and nature.We are governed by the forces of nature.

The mystics of life! Thanks for sharing.

The second and the last stanzas are marvellous. The inevitable trends of live have been effectively implied.

the elements will never cease the fire will keep burning but you'll not be you and i'll not be i Wonderful and thought-provoking lines!

'to reach that fleeting moment of non-existence' Rachel Ann Butler

extremly well and well appealing. marks 10

Perfect.! ...........under one roof two chracters live as one but there are two souls?

While it is true that there is nothing new under the sun, this is a very compelling piece of work. Excellent, Indira. Love, Sandra

:) . and one thing is diffinite about me, God breathe life into me. :) . the rest, the flesh is belongs to the universe. but that soul of mine, is the lords.. :) . the poem has some truth. :) . the carbon is you may have been shared by einstein or newton, or King Solomon. :)