Monday, June 18, 2012

A Single Tear. Comments

Rating: 5.0

I'm sitting in class watching the time go by,
I'm waiting for the boy opposite me to see eye to eye.
I'm feeling a single tear run down my cheeck,
As im waiting for him to turn and speak.
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Tammie LilAimo
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Sandy Player 16 December 2012

This poem stands out from your others(or rather the ones I have read): it moves at a calmer tempo. Pleasant to the ear too, the words consist mostly of soft letters, though inevitably, there are harsher syllables. A good one-cheers

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Karen Sinclair 18 June 2012

there i one typo... hope you dont mind and i make more than my fair share cheek..

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Karen Sinclair 18 June 2012

such a sweet and innocent look on the first flutters of love... adorable and well written too.. tyvm karen

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