A Silence Comments

Dear Raj, Thanks for your feedback and patience for reading my poems .. its a good point that you have placed about the redundancy of the silent word.. and situations... may be a shorter version would have been reader friendly, ... I am quite a newbie in writing poems so its good that experienced campaigners like you guide out the right way! ... thanks again, ,

Hi XOR 999 The poem has many lovely and sophisticated situations all expressed so subtly and beautifully: A silent game suffering a silent loss A silent thought inside a silent cause I wonder if the poem could have been shorter as, personally, I found the sustained and long list of 'silent' situations quite demanding on myself as a reader.

Hi XOR 999 a sophisticated poem with deep thought as in the lines: A silent drift towards an endless night A silent eye watching the silent light A silent gaze to this incomplete picture A silent tale without a scripture At some point, I feel, due to its sustained lines, the poem becomes a little too demanding and requires too much of effort on the reader's part... The situations though (as in the lines I've quoted above from your poem) , are interesting and well-expressed...