Wednesday, August 5, 2009

A Robbery Comments

Rating: 5.0

She stared in horror,
as I looked over her, towering.
She lay on the floor,
a painful reminder of what happened here.
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Kylie Pastor
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Wesley Mincin 11 August 2009

It's interesting, I'll give you that. Putting dialogue into a poem is actually difficult you did an okay job here. I thought it was pretty good. Read my poem, Lover of Sin. That had a lot of dialogue in it. What I do find amusing, is how in the end, she heads off to school.

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