A Random Poem About My Day In The Life Of My Mind 2.3 (C) 10-19-09 Comments

Wow. I will be honest with you, because I think you deserve that. I liked reading your work, until your use of the N word, which I don't believe is ever appropriate in any sense. I refused to continue reading since I saw that that was not the first time that word was used in the poem. I will try to read other works of yours, and I do hope that they have a higher standard of class. Also, from reading the part of this poem I read, as well as your biography, I think you should work on punctuation, especially since your work seems really well written. It is a great distraction when there is no punctuation in a piece, everything seems to run together and you never know when to pause. Best Regards, Em Jay

these seem if random too be fine lines to me..iip