A Random Poem About My Day In The Life Of My Mind 1.5 (C) 4-29-09 Comments

Wow! ! Your poems are fun to read, so rich! You have the spark wich makes you shine, I found in your poems many things! can understand all your feelings, questions, and I enjoy the way you play with words.10

Intense piece. Could you guys possibly look at my poems? I came across some old poems from high school, and intend to post most of them up. I want human input, thoughts, and criticism. I will return the favor without a doubt.

This reads like plain rambling to me. what is the focus of the piece? What are you trying to suggest or say?

great rite bro really liked it keep up da good work

Words of poem should directly flow from the mind to the paper as you have done and doing which the mark of natural or pure poetry needs to be encouraged. You fit into the slot very well! Best wishes!

I wish I could write like you.10