Sunday, October 30, 2005

A Raindropp For You Comments

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Can you smell the rain, crescending
Little drops beaded on your face,
Though I see differently with my own eyes,
A twinkling jewel under gray skies,
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Lee Tran
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Max Reif 02 November 2005

I too think that's a beautiful metaphor. A real love poem, Lee, original, I think. A couple very small things: Is 'crescending' correct? And the idiom is, 'our for the takING'. Nice writing!

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