A Promised Love Poem by Asif Baloch

'A promised love made by him When he sent me in this hole A true love is on its way To take me away' Nice, nice, nice.10++

a nice love poem. good luck! ! !

Hello poet friend. I did visit and want to encourage you to keep improving and posting, not too bad. Loyd

Aijaz....pls look into the second line, gloom itself means darkness....when she enters she cant brighten up ur room with darkness, make it as 'Every corner will brighten and lose the gloom'. And except for few more grammatical snags ur poem is good.

Pretty good poem, but the first lines is awkward. You don't need an 's' on 'enters.' It should read 'she will enter my room.' The first line of a poem brings the reader in, you obviously want them to continue reading. However, this is not very inviting. The same thing happens towards the end of the poem when you say, 'which will feels like.' It's a problem that can easily be fixed.

A great poem by a great poet

...words emitting intense love here.....fine expression.......10

the rythm builds on a nice outcome at the end, , , liked reading it

nice rythmic poem...like the message at the end...we have indeed all been promised love...we just have to learn to accept it with grace and not fall prey to disillusionment.

beautiful poem keep writing :) a 10 from me :)