He licked his sun-dried lips
Biting his thin nails
Eyes glaring at the whitewashed virgin wall
The wall was speaking to him, wanting him to touch her
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a wonderful narrative rich with imagination and a haunting image of the human soul attempting redemption with all his heart and perhaps it did happen but too late too many deaths including his own a fine poem
Touching and engaging until the end, which I think can be improved. I believe the protagonist should remain defiant and strong even as death approaches. It's the impresion I get. Martin