A Perfect Couple (12/25/09) Comments

You have a good start writing in free verse. But the subject is one many people write about, and they sound very much alike. When you get more life experience you'll have more to write about if you don't already.

very sad.. but it was so lively.. dying cause of failure...happens many time.. brilliantly written...good one..

This sounds like my poem, 'she could have been the best... this world's ever seen' I really like the subject matter of your poem. There's some real emotion there, which is always the key to writing good poetry. I like it.