As she sits alone on the hillside watching the sunrise
Silence is golden, movement is absent
Upon the grassy fields she sees shadowing darkness
The freshness in the air surrounds her intensely
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Lisa this poem has beautiful images and it is so well written, it was a pleasure to read. cheers Sylvie top marks
Can one hear silence, or do we just teel it, deep in our hearts...that suspended feeling, waiting for dawn..how lovely.
What an amazingly beautiful thought, very atmospheric, Love Duncan x
Lisa, what a lovely pantoum. Well constructed and musical. You've inspired me to have a go. Thanks. love, Alison
MMM! i love a good pantoum! lol this is a very interesting one, beautiful! my pantoum is called'In A Song' if you wanna read it. ive always thought the pattern was fun to follow.
Lisa, the imagery is well expressed here. I could visualize myself sitting on the hillside watching the sun slowly creeping up in the horizon. Beautiful, just beautiful. Top Marks from me. Thanks for sharing it my friend. David