Friday, September 4, 2015

A Pair Of Eyes Comments

Rating: 5.0

Was it in a dream when I first saw her,
Or was it in the crowded street afar,
Or was it on the beach by the setting sun,
That she, my heart had won?
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Valsa George
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Still I wait, looking in vain Never allowing my hopes to wane beautifully poetic. Thank you Valsa George for conceiving the futility of long wait

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Akhtar Jawad 29 May 2017

Flowers blossomed and wilted Snowflakes hardened and melted Time made its hasty run Spring, summer, autumn and winter in turn Still I wait, looking in vain Never allowing my hopes to wane A wonderful poem. Suicide (By Akhtar Jawad) What the pair shows is not beautiful, What the pair lets me to listen to is not a melody, What the pair smells is not a perfume, What the pair kissed is a bitter poison. What my fingers touch is nothing but fire. Life! All the five pairs are ruled by the sixth but it's a singular, and it's my heart that is still hopeful, and believes one day you'll be a reddish wine, with an appetizing smell, the music when I shall pour you into the glass will be soothing the fire will burn my all frustrations I shall kiss you with love I don’t know how long this kiss will be I am afraid though I’ll kiss you but before I drink you you’ll kill yourself. (Thanks Valsa George, sometimes you inspire me to write a poem within a few minutes)

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Loke Kok Yee 15 June 2016

With eyes like her I will better see No more squinting to find the letter B thanks Valsa-10

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Kavya . 07 September 2015

wow superb poem on eyes and loved the pic too..

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Lyn Paul 05 September 2015

Beautiful words presented through your beautiful eyes. Thank You

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Kumarmani Mahakul 04 September 2015

Time made its hasty run Spring, summer, autumn and winter in turn Still I wait, looking in vain Never allowing my hopes to wane.....amusing and interesting depiction. A marvellous poem really having best phraseology. Thanks for sharing madam......10

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Madathil Rajendran Nair 04 September 2015

May the wait be soon over The eternal lover soon find her (10)

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Clarence Prince 04 September 2015

Indeed an unforgettable pair of eyes, that caused you to flew high! One featherless wings I flew high. A poem that features many things! Well done, thanks for sharing!

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Kelly Kurt 04 September 2015

I too am a sucker for beautiful eyes

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Jaishree Nair 04 September 2015

Waiting for the pair of eyes ......The emotions of true love captured in a unique flow.enjoyed the rhyme .thanks for sharing

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Sanjukta Nag 04 September 2015

mesmerizing... beautiful use of language and rhyming...10

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