A Pain Looked Over Comments

I really liked this one.It described exactly how I feel at times.And you can't really tell anyone close to you how you feel.I tried one time and was told that I was being too dramatic.Since then I just say that they wouldn't understand.

I agree with several others that you have a lot of wonderful phrases in this piece. Some of them are quite powerful in their impact on the reader. The reader wants to help you right now. Yours, is really a call to action. I think whoever reads it feels that way. GW62

wow. i love this poem. 'Just laying here dying inside slowly Pain twisting around in me Inside and out pain is all around me No matter where I go or who I see' <- my favorite.

No one even sees the pain I hold inside I can cry a few thousand tears and no one would even notice I know of that... people think I am all happiness and giggles but really I have a lot of pain just hiden inside me. good job. Becca