A Night Of Love Comments

A lovely love poem, full of wonderful images and nice rhyming.

oh drat! I erased the comment I was working on! well, you offered me the poem “A Night of Love”. I didn’t find it, but I DID find “A Night Of Love”! close enough! I like it through stanza 2; that’s how far I’ve gotten so far. done. although I don’t get too excited at the prospect of reading another ‘love poem’ [I prefer humor, horror, and hummingbirds; not necessarily all together], I guess I could send this to MyPoemList. favorite lines: “Please let this evening last, no thoughts of yesterdays past.” ……………. past is good; passed would work also I think. but here is a test for you (and me) : do you mind if I suggest a change to one line? I don’t hear a “NO”, so here I go “Swinging and twirling, with smiles on our face. So blessed, we have found that special place.” …… ……….. I like face/place as a rhyme, but it seems like ‘faces’ would be more appropriate, so I suggest [JUST a suggestion; maybe this will give you food for thought] either working the lines to allow face/place or faces/places. how about: “Swinging and twirling, with a smile on each face. ……………………………..place” OR “Swinging and twirling, with smiles on our faces. So blessed, we have found our special places.” but DON’T change “Swinging and twirling”; I love THAT. thanks for sharing. you may thank me now OR yell at me now. bri :) p.s. when you mentioned “entwine”, I thought maybe I should avert my eyes.

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