Friday, July 3, 2020

A Night Journey Comments

Rating: 5.0

A Poem for the Two of Us

I went in search of LUCK today.
I looked first in my apartment.
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Daniel Brick
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Glen Kappy 17 July 2020

hey, daniel! i like this one. one realistic detail especially stands out to me—" a tree swelled out of the shadows" —excellent! i've experienced this. in the first verse likening the dusk sky to a persian carpet also stands out to me. a suggestion, i think this poem would do better without the last stanza which seems, to me, somewhat uncharacteristic of you. -glen

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Bharati Nayak 08 July 2020

Perhaps LUCK is not a thing we can hold, even mold into what we think we need. LUCK is rather a mood that friendship creates and sustains. It is not an event, it is a series of actions that promote joy and hope.- - -

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Bernard F. Asuncion 04 July 2020

A well penned brilliant poem. Simply splendid.....10++

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