A Magician Comments

yes, this is very good. we are magicians, putting feelings into actual words is a complicated thing to do and for one to do so is considered a magical thing. very good job.

this is a great piece. you referred poet to magician. we are magicians, dats true.. we may create words wrapped with love or hatred, we are creative. YOU ARE creative. submit more, plz. ;)

This is excellent, especially for your first attempt - simple, yet effective. i may show you heaven and still make you sad.. I loved this part especially, brilliantly written - can't wait to read more from you! x

a magnificent job for your first poem. very imaginative writing and creative expression. i like the last two lines. because in poetry nothing is banned you have captured a truth in those two short and simple lines. In poetry you can say what you want to sayin many ways, you can be blunt or you can use a metaphor, there are no resrtictions, you can express yourself in any way you choose. it is great outlet for both happy and sad emotions alike. welcome to the world of poetry, great job on your first write. keep on writing and find yourself within your words, my friend. looking forward to reading more and seeing how your writing style grows and develps over time. Jen

A great tribute from me to this great poem.10++...keep going.Merna

Great poem. Very true, too. Thanks for sharing and keep writing! :) Athena *** words will change the world ***

This poem shows the magnificance of poetry.if this is truely ur first poem then u really must keep going.and i am totally blown away.