A Lovely Pink Lotus Poem by Lalit Vivekanand Kamble

A Lovely Pink Lotus

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When I looking towards sky
Light touches my face and says hi

Blowing wind kisses my chicks and doing Hi-Fi
That's time I am a happy guy

Morning light in my eyes like a spark
It Wants to vanish my past dark

Night was full of fear
And now light asking me to switch the gear

At night I had cold blood
a shut bud surrounded by mud

But Mr Grower blows on me his blissful focus
I realised that I am a lovely pink lotus

As Mr Grower goes high and high
Miss Bees started kissing me and then fly

One guy sat near bank on his knees
He watches me from hour, I don't know what he sees
Do you?
By Lalit Vivekanand Kamble

A Lovely Pink Lotus
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
This poem his on daily story of beautiful lotus. In the dark night a bud of lotus was lonely and surrounded by very bad and discussing type of a mud that what's the reason of fear. As we know that there are different peoples who have some fears from the past. Or somethings what was wrong was In there past. God gives everyone another chance for growing from the fears. Sad lonely and fearful person might be don't know that he or she is like lotus. There may be a mud there may be a loneliness there may be a dark but one day you can get your happiness definitely..
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Luis A. Estable 06 August 2021

There are a few grammatical errors in this. First, It should 'I am looking. And i would say towards the sky and not 'towards sky.' It sounds it bit odd. The writing is too loose and the rhyme has too many clichés to work fine. I want to help you.

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