Wednesday, July 12, 2006

A Love Like You Comments

Rating: 3.0

I watch your shadow move
you sweep me off my feet
closer into you
until our lips do meet
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Carike Klokow
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Kenneth Fordham 06 February 2008

Very well written, good flow, good rhyme, you might want to watch your spelling and capitals where needed, I think the only thing I would have done differently is to put a space inbetween the last line, to keep it seperate from your last stanza. Good Job, Ken

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Kefentse Sathekge 05 November 2007

you got what it takes to grow in poetry, i can feel while reading that it came deep within you.

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Carike Klokow

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