A Love Letter. Comments

Mary, I have to agree with Denis that a little pruning would give this poem (attractive as it is) a better shape, but your obviously have a great talent and I look forward to reading more. Warmly Alison

This is a lovely piece though some of it (about a third) could be jettisoned and a couple of cringe-making rhyme (I love Rhyme) . But this has more to offer that is positive and very touching. The imagery is great the flow of the narrative is good, except in odd places. I feel like a hairdresser at the moment, seeing someone with a hair styl that I feel could be bettered. So it, this is your poem and you will look at it yourself in thefuture and change things about it. A poem is never finished.

MARY X..I do believe your command of abstract verse is quite commendable... However, your style, which I find esoterically connective and brilliant, is MOST commendable.Pen On, young lady X ! '''''''''''''''''''''''''FJR

This is a beautiful poem. It's very expressive.