A Lonely Man's Monologue Comments

Today was a day of false hopes for me too. My heart is so shattered as well. I liked the epic perspectives of this poem.

Good use of metaphors.

i lke the description of feeling.

a nice poem.Best wishes

It has been mentioned before when a poet writes a dark or sombre poem that he or she may be depressed. But I find that to be neither here nor there, what matters surely is the response a poem gets, not the poets state of mind? I enjoyed reading this poem, and I don't feel depressed!

really touchy poem...

Asif this is the best poem of yours that I have read. You're not trying to force any of the lines. Your imagery is exciting. I can't fault your English (not that I would want to - if English is not the language of your birth, I can't imagine how difficult using it must be.) I am impressed. It's so difficult to respond honestly to poems. You don't want to break anyone's heart. But in this case responding is a pleasure. Thank you so much.

like the poem, well written

Keep this up Mr Asif, this indeed is a nice piece. Pls, keep it up.

The monologue of the lonely man is soul stirring.The presentation strikes at the root of the heart.Well written.

I am sure you are not a depressed person! A poet can be very objective most of the time! He deals with all sorts of themes, hardly related to his life! Nevertheless, this is a very poignant write!

i really wonder sometimes if a poem is an honest/true portrayal of the poet's life. OR has the poet made up a very believable story which is not true? i wonder what is the case with this poem. most of my poems are true portrayals of me or things around me, but my 'halloween approaches' poem and my soon-to-be submitted 6 Foot 3 poem are not really ME or real happenings. one reader of halloween thought it was scary and asked me to write another one. so i did. thanks for sharing. by the way, one person commenting below assumes that there is a woman behind your poem. not necessarily true! maybe not a man either. bri edwards my poems are now listed alphabetically by subject(s) , not titles. well not exactly. look for the two i mentioned under Scary.

asif, i almost always use rhymes BUT i didn't even notice the lack of them in your poem until you mentioned it! i especially liked the visions of grave digger and queen bee and sands of the desert and the last stanza in its entirety. thanks a lot for sharing. today i added categories at the beginning of each of my titles to make it easier for readers to decide want to look at. bri

like like likeeeeee loved this style of writing keep it up :)

nice Asif.and terrific. and the romance changes to horror.and the poems to the novels.and the smiles to the grimace.love it ~nb

You sad man you, for being in an emotional situation. Dont allow it to hinder your progress in writing, you have great skill in writing. thanks for sharing.

a very nice poem sir.. The deep emotions nd pain of a lonely man, very wel describd. Bt one shud be strong enough to face such situations bcoz there are times in life wen one has to walk alone and the one who survives is the one who wins.. Luvd read the poem. Thanks for sharing sir..

Please go after this woman of yours. If she says no, at least you tried.

Brilliant poem with great lines, loved it, thanks for sharing!

extreme disappointment and loneliness decpicted deftly in the following line My days have become months And my nights have become years My poems have lost rhyme like the hot summer days My songs losing all softness have become hard rock great monologue