Wednesday, February 6, 2008

A Little While Eternal Comments

Rating: 3.3

Tell him I love to weave these words
into a song upon his luscious lips,
to make the rhythm of my heart
a gentle melody in his ears.
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Jessel Jane Tevar Toring
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James Jason Dye 20 December 2008

This was well-written and beautiful.

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Kesav Easwaran 13 December 2008

lines romantic soft and sweet...breezing as one reads on...'make his heart be sunlight to my darkest sky...' is a pleasing phrase...good work, Jane...10

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Raj Arumugam 08 November 2008

a lyrical and beautiful poem...it has a wonderful ring and rhythm to it....

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Ashraful Musaddeq 19 October 2008

10 for this lovely love poem.

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Geovanni Leaño 10 February 2008

wow! i'm speechless! i'm too lucky to have discovered this site! ^_^ well anyway i just wanted to inform you Jane that this poem left my heart warm and touched my face with a smile ^_^ thanks! -GanNi

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Mary Gordley 07 February 2008

Jane I found this very lovely and romantic as heck. Thanks

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