A Letter! ! Comments

Wow, I think this poem is so powerful. I wouldn't change a thing. I understand where you're coming from and I think you handled it beautifully

aww thats good, but its so sad! does your dad really treat you that way: (

It's a really great piece of work....so much emotion to it....well done ~

This poem has a lot of feeling put into it. I thikn its really good. I have a question though. How could she write the letter if she was dead?

Becky, I think the emotions in this are very powerful. Child abuse is a pretty serious topic and it's an important one to shed light onto. You've done a good job here. To be honest, I would remove the first statement where you say it's untrue. Although it may be fictional, when you put that there for the reader to read it first all it seems to do is say ''Don't read this cause I don't mean it' You know what I mean? What you've written is strong and rather than minimize it.....let the reader just feel it. For somebody it is true...even if it's not for you. I hope you understand what I'm saying. I think that like discredits your poem before your readers even have the chance to decide for themselves. Sincerely, Mary