A Lesson On Poetry From My Five Year Old Comments

Lovely. A magic moment. Real love in action. Thank you.

Lovely. A magic moment. Real love in action. Thank you.

Thanks all for your kind comments. I have not been on PH for a few years now and this was an early poem, one that needs an edit (his face with pride did glow? You just can't get away with the syntax folks) . I still rhyme and enjoy form, but form with more of a challenge about it. The obvious end rhymes I do less and less. But I guess this one was part of a personal poetry journey and I should feel honoured to be picked for a poem of the day. Maybe I might post the odd poem now and then, and come by and visit the site for a look about. thanks again X

Quite natural and it ought to be one of the winning mode, in every one's heart. Thanks for sharing. Congrats for being the poem of the day.

good one, thanks, I like it

I will surely add 'wow- - - -'to this poem.So lovely, so well written.

Love it. All those special moment of mother and child together.....no one could said it better but a mom. Thanks for sharing.

a precocious child indeed! Loved the intimate look at a special mother and child moment! Congrats on your poet of the day! I had one last month, and its special.....

Love it! My kids give me their opinions and advice on my writing as well...and I had them all write me poems for mother's day. I enjoyed your write and the story that came along with it. Thanks for sharing and congratulations on poem of the day. Take care.

An excellent story poem woven around an outstanding theme of the bonding of a mother with her growing child. Heartiest Congratulations for composing such a nice poem as also on it's selection as Poem of the Day.

An excellent story poem woven around an outstanding theme of the bonding of a mother with her growing child.

What a story tense to poem.......wel written....... : -) congratulations..for member poet......Keep presenting...nurul.

it is hot and humid outside but your poem made up for everything! ! a very pleasant and enjoyable read, you are obviously one who writes for pleasure and you do it so very well. congrats and thanks-10

Good write. Beside this I suggest Charlie's school-learnt teachings are essential for the beginner's who want to understand poetry, but that is not sufficient for the poet of this time. Rather the revolt against rhyme and rhythm inspires and ignites the poet to create his/her own from the time of short past. Any way it's a good lesson for Charlie but not for Stevie Taite. Thank you all.

Refreshing to read this beautiful poem from yours and your 5 year olds heart. Poem of the day and poetic license you have gained. Congratulations. Great to read you again Stevie.

And he kissed me on the lips! Thanks for sharing this lovely poem with us.

Love that great, unexpected ending Stevie. Thanks65466

.kids are really the most beautiful creation of god................this poem shows your love for them.......lovely.I invite you to read my poem-To bosom thee. I'll rise.........plzz do comment your views..

oh such a nice sweet poem about an innocent child, , , , Kids are Gods most beautiful invention that bring joy and smiles in our lives...

The poem is creditable being a true story. At times we are made to learn from our little children.The way you have handled him shows your great attitude towards children! VERY CAPTIVATING!