I'll fight the position
That I was pushed into
Those enemies did come fast
Boy! was it all a blast!
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p.s. I wrote one I know you would like: 'Elizabethan Nightmare', in case you have not read it yet. best, alicia
Oh, this is funny! I especially liked your pivot shift here: I'll fight the position That I was pushed into (Those) enemies did come fast. More like this, please! best alicia
'They couldn't connect to my sense of humour So they added all the extra rumours Turning me into a nut case of a woman' i really liked this line, the whole poem is alright but some lines pack more energy than others. hope u dont mind my honesty, then again i rarely like ppls poems anyway.
Life is one big Joke. We should laugh at it. Loved this one Suzan. Peace.
Life is one big Joke. We should laugh at it. Loved this one Suzan. Peace.
I'm not sure that you needed the last line about life. Sometimes, the less said is better as an ending. I'm big on endings. Otherwise, this is a very good poem. Well worth reading. I totally recommend it. GW62