A Humorous Death Comments

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(cont.) NOT only does only a part of one comment show up below {the definition of 'lascivious'}, but it shows up on A Humorous Death instead of the poem Private! ! ! !

Wow, some comments from me have already shown up, but one is incomplete. (some comments have taken days to show up this year) (cont.)

'In the mortuary of mind lay my ancestors arms open and calling. The dying left in me will not speed its entirity towards the inevitable.' I suggest 'lie', not 'lay', and 'entirety', not 'entirity'.

'lascivious lə-sĭv′ē-əs adjective Given to or expressing

So clever written, Sally P.Plum

Hi, Ramesh, glad you enjoyed my stuff. x

Sally, the title of this moment had immediately caught mine attention. I was very curious to see where you would be going with the humour. You've done an outstanding job! In my near death experience, I had the joy and honour of experiencing humour. And it had come from a truly unexpectable source! Thanks for sharing.

Very beautiful poem dear poet...... thanks////////

Your poems are Profoundly sophisticated. I am impressed at your " education" too- or lack thereof. I myself, though 'educated' have found the most powerful education through that of life though it be more difficult, and one one may need a break from in a University sometimes.

Thankyou for all of your remarks I’ve taken them on board. Lovely to hear from you.(Is that correct?) Best Regards Sally.

OH, YEAH, VERY NICE puncuation! such is to be EXPECTED on a POEM site, isn't it? but it AIN'T always so! ! ! i wish i could SEE the punctuation more easily; that one reason i enlarge the poem on this screen. bri :)

(CONT.) Sally, i plan to use this in my upcoming October showcase, where will appear the poem title & text, and your name (3 times!) . any questions? showcases almost always have the month and year in the title. Thanks. bri ;)

ok, i read it AGAIN. In the mortuary of mind lay my ancestors... i wondered if lay was correct. i want to say lie, but the tenses of to lie and to lay are even confusing for me i guess (some of them) . i guess the problem is i'm not SURE if you want past or present tense. [i GUESS! ] I LIKE the m/m alliteration. (CONT.)

i came back for another peek, and something seemed amiss. en·tire·ty enˈtī(ə) rtē, enˈtīrədē/ noun noun: entirety; plural noun: entireties the whole of something. of course, being from England, you may not know any better! bri :)

Sally, one of the earlier (they are, after all, ALL earlier than this one! !) comments asks why you hadn't had 'new poems'; this was in early 2015. don't they realize that people slow down? ? ? OR maybe you had SPEEDED UP? ! too much partying, drinking, 'fooling around'; YOU KNOW! too little time for writing! ! ! too many hangovers! ! bri ;) but i guess you were 'sober' ENOUGH to leave a poem comment for me this past month. thanks.

(cont.) were they laughing AT YOU, or WITH YOU? i guess joyfully and glad point towards 'with you', but..........maybe YOU were not joyful? perhaps you'd think being had some (or many) advantages/comforts you'd miss? maybe, MAYBE, ...someday we shall both 'know'. bri ;) also enjoyed last stanza....a lot.

(cont.) at first i saw no humor, but then i saw it, after scrolling DOWN past the ]][[, it being the last stanza. yes, some humour/humor perhaps there. BUT i'm not sure of the type/cause of laughter from your ancestors. (cont.)

SOME favorite lines: In the mortuary of mind lay my ancestors arms open and calling. Oh, SALLYYY! We are WAITING..... for YOU! ! this may be a bit 'intellectual' for me to FATHOM completely. i KNOW (i think) down is where i'll be heading 'THEN'. To MyPoemList. (cont.)

nothing is permanent. everything that begins end too. very nice and beautiful poem thank you tony