A Gentle Thaw Comments

Hi Ernestine. How eloquently you describe the thaw, and how many times have we all experienced it in the chill of winter. a very pleasant read thankyou. Regards Dave T.

What a gentle, classic piece. Lovely to read another rhymer! F

Beautifully written. I also like the rhyming structure of this work. Andrew x

Evokes clear visuals in my mind I used to love early morning walks as dawn was breaking but my old bones bid me stay in the warm and remember what I ca no longer do

We have a lovely rythm going on in 'A gentle Thaw' with alternate rhymes some really intelligent poetry going on here. I'm just going to quote the last to lines to show you where this excellent work stumbles slightly And the remedy: He'll scuttle off, now the word scuttle has 2 syllables; so if we look at the line again, we can count the syllables He'll scuttle off, expression all forlorn, gives us 8 syllables (expression has 3.) Now we come to the last line the, which has 11 syables which very slightly upsets the balance. So if we write: To leave the day to start its gentle thaw. Then does the poem come right. I 'm only telling you this because I'm rather impressed with this poem. It has what I think is a lovely flow, and we don't want it to jar at the end. Now to sum up the whole poem - Well-done! It is by the way the nearest thing to real poetry I've seen on this site. Let me know what you think Daphne Grant

Ernestine this poem truly is a beautiful and a most Excellent poem! I got to tell you I so enjoyed the Read...I am wowed by this One truly I AM. Inspiring and just a gem to find on this sort of unremarkable day... I am not sure yet what Great poet work this poem reminds me of? But all I know is it is Brillant! ! Ten/Ten.......... Thanx so much for sharing. =Shelley=

A poem at harmony with nature that inspires the reader to seek the same state of grace and peace.

A field full of all the pleasure that the good Lord has provided, nature all around us. Wonderful poem Ernestine, excellent work as usual.--Melvina--

I love the feeling in this.Such raw emotion from natures hand.Just beautiful.Love Duncan

this is a lovely little poem.

I was up this morning before the sun came up, so I got to watch this same frosty chill melt away! How wonderfully expressive you are.

Its a lovely poem Ernestine written by a lot of thought............regards........willow

A beautiful, evocative piece of writing. I am so envious of your talent. Warmest regards, Eve

Superb, Ernestine! The first three lines chime in my mind like Anglo -Saxon poetry.Would that we all could refine our words in the fire of our intellect as you do.

Another wonderful poem from Ernestine! Well done. Blessings from Ray.

finally the soul understands and enters peace no horror here, the home we cannever leave welcomes the heart to share simple sight simple delight our being whole not shattered by the harsh glare of headlights illuminating what? dim concrete, so brutal without mercy but here the mercy of nature gives, and gives so what can we do but accept the blessing a wonderful poem

This is so melodic it's almost a song, or a lullaby. Lovely!

Dear Ernestine Lovely images, you have a wonderful flow in this one.Captivating! Thankyou....Love Duncan

Not only is this a true depiction of morning awakening, it is well written. Also, I learned what is a 'haw'. Thank you. Rusty

Hypnotic. Regards, Gina.