Friday, January 10, 2014

A Garbage Poem With Chracters From Ph Comments

Rating: 4.1

Miss lyn paul has a bad day as some gangsters snatch a golden chain from her neck. she chases them and the story begins.....

lyn paul came running she came with a gun
seeing her angry as hell, all the bad boys did run
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COMMENTS
Robert Murray Smith 22 September 2022

This is a horrible poem, lacking in proper punctuation, capitalization, and meaningful contest. Sorry I had to vote it a one, but zero was not available.

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Bri Edwards 22 September 2022

Janav used to be one of my buddies on PH. Alas, he and plenty of others have disappeared; I'm sure some are dead. Others, like dear Valsa George, have left due to changes on PH. : ( bri

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Rajesh Thankappan 25 November 2014

Hilarious! The words sums it all.

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Om Chawla 09 May 2014

Oh It is such a lovely write, Kanav. I regret not having read it earlier.

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Elena Sandu 25 January 2014

Haha, what a witty pen, how nice of you, it was a big surprise to see our poet friends as heroes of your verse! Thank you!

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Geetha Jayakumar 25 January 2014

Beautiful poem Kanav...Really enjoyed the act which you directed from your wonderful brain and made everyone to play and made run...I hope the pizza has reached you by now else some other tricky poem may come from your pen to play...Really a wonderful write. Keep it up.

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Gary H 20 January 2014

pretty sweet poem to read lol, nicely done.

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Rubab Atwal 18 January 2014

A hilarious poem very creative..had fun reading it

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Valerie Dohren 15 January 2014

Ha ha, very amusing poem Kanav. Hope everyone has recovered! !

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Dinesan Madathil 13 January 2014

Oh Rachel, I am sorry that I forgot you are ' sunprincess' yet to be married to 'dreamprince'.

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Poet's Fan 13 January 2014

really enjoyed..: i tis a hilarious poem, , subtle satire.. nice creativity n very much involving...

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Valsa George 13 January 2014

I am happy that our wonderful team work helped put out the fire that was about to burn down the house of poor Mr. Nair. But I can't understand why Lyn should take revenge on him who is no party to the harm done to her by the miscreant youngsters! Bri's dialling the plumber instead of the fire squad is quite interesting! Was his act inadvertent or deliberate, I wonder... his personality being such... (ha..ha) Any way, glad that you have given me such heroic dimensions at this age..! ! .A valiant woman with a soldier's heart... vow! ! Admonishing the two chicken hearted youngster(s) (Is Bri, a youngster?) this brave woman jumped into the fire knowing so well that it could become a funeral pyre, came out miraculously unscathed, (may be because Sunprincess implored the intervention of her father, the Sun and Shahzia came with the hose to spray water) and do what little this brave soul (let me repeat) could do to save one of her great friends... Mr. Nair, from a grave tragedy! ! Oh, Kanav! Your imagination is running riot and you have made it a 'foul smelling garbage'! ! If you clear this mess, I will give you 10 Truly Enjoyed! !

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Neela Nath Das 12 January 2014

Beautiful! Enjoyed each N every line and read between lines with great attention! Great guy!

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Dinesan Madathil 11 January 2014

I am surfacing in the poem three times and all are hugging me tight! What an honour Kanav! Burning down my house is welcome as there are Phoenixes among the homes as well. Somebody over here will help me with bricks to construct a new home.. Kanav, most of the female characters have really been very much married for decades together and you have prefixed miss before their names. Though they would like to be addressed so, their possessive husbands may not like it. So make Valsa, Lyn and Rachel Ms immediately. Mr Bri is EARTHPRINCE in one way.

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Bri Edwards 10 January 2014

remind me to never visit the home of Sun Princess (see her comment below) . :)

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Bri Edwards 10 January 2014

kanav, i was going to include you in a poem with other ph poets and that's why i looked at your poem list to see if there was a good one to read. for some reason i did not see any poem of yours on MyPoet: List. NOW I READ THIS! ! ! ! A Garbage Poem........ i think you MAY have mentioned my name more than the rest, as is only proper since i am the best poet among all! ! ! ! but, WERE YOU trying TO MAKE FUN OF ME? ? ? for that i may not bake the pizza i was planning to send to you today. but if you are REALLY LUCKY i'll still throw you into my poem to be entitled I'll Quit Poetry. don't get TOO excited. thanks for sharing. i have enjoyed some contact with most of the poets you have mentioned. thanks for sharing.............i think. :) br i'm not sure when my poem will be ready, so just take a tranquilizer or two while you wait. yours now goes to my lengthening MyPoemList.

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Shahzia Batool 10 January 2014

Kanav! ! ! Just for the sake of rhyming with Fire, You made ME do that with the house of Dinesh Nair quietly i wish on PH to Be what will I do if he decides to write an epic against Me? What's the purpose of avenging Mr. Bri? Instead you could have ordered pizza at home for free I can see the enjoyment of Lyn By her comment and her grin... rest assured none will block as you are one of the poets' fine stock!

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Lyn Paul 10 January 2014

You seem to know me well Kanav because I would chase a gangster as I would be fuming, instead of the gun and the fire I would have my pepper spray and maybe some loud screaming. I love the plumber instead of the fire brigade. Overall excellent team work getting it out and you have put a big smile on my dial. So thank so much Kanav.

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