A Funeral Comments

The reason Cody didn't know who you meant is because that is what happens when one writes in this style. This is another good piece of writing for this obscure writing form. It is actually, more clear than most. I think the topic is quite difficult and may be too difficult here. The title is fair warning but the content is more than most may expect. This is more cultural and generational than actual. You set a very difficult task here and there is always a penalty for failure of any kind.Overall, its good. Greenwolfe 1962

very good. i loved it. although im a little puzzeled when you said 'she hadnt corrupted him yet' she being who? but over great great poems im going to add this to my favorites.

Moving and with a rare empathy. Thanks.

Beautiful, controlled but pssionate repetitions like a chorus that comes in and reminds us of the raw unfairness that the death of a child makes us see in the world. A very moving piece of work.

hey i think this is really good and very moving

Wounds heal memories duck death a crystal [ as Anna puts it] stealthily escapes enroute the longitude of face Very moving Dave

Beautifully contained, but the reader is aware of your grief. I agree with you that, , 'Animals recognize the soul'. Take care. Warmest regards, Sandra

this gave me chills. very well done.

Nothing is more final than death and it leaves us so saddened, especially when the person is very young. We wonder how life can go on. But it does. So well put, David. Keep writing and sharing with us. Best Wishes, Marilyn

no words or sympathy can ever console the parents of the dead....the most painful gesture is to see a parent weeping for a child....I can smell a satire...so true that people go on as anything ever happened...their words seems to be hollow...the pain can only be felt by the one who has lost the loved one....your words carry the emotion and convey the realistic scene... Man finds himself helpless here...no science or super natural come to the rescue....

This brought a tear to my eye David, a very poignant write, written from the heart, so sorry to you all for your loss 10 Lynda xxx

Crikey, this is so difficult to read and digest (not the poem, the subject) . I'm so sorry to read this. I hope your cousin is at peace now. HG: -) xx