Wednesday, May 30, 2007

A Fly Comments

Rating: 3.2

Just a fly on the wall
watching this small world go by
trapped in this house
it sees the door open
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COMMENTS
Kristen Manski 16 May 2017

This is really good and is a really good metaphor.

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Red Blooded Black Hearted 10 January 2008

Your wings will repair one day and you'll be free. I just hope it happens soon. Keep writting, I love your poetry.

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Robert Wright 20 June 2007

I love the frenetic pace of this poem! ! I can feel the pent up energy!

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Barry Van Allen 06 June 2007

U.U., Did you ever notice how it sits at the bottom of the jar for a minute, but, then keeps looking for a way out again? ... inspiring in a way. B.V.A.

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Soul Writer 31 May 2007

nice! them wings will heal just gotta give em time.... or just turn into a bee and sting the person closing the door :)

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