A Fleeting Thought Comments

Well conceived and nicely encapsulated with insight. A beautiful creation. Thanks for sharing, Chuck.

A fleeting thought, perhaps, but the one that most definitely lingers....less is more and every single word here counts. Lovely Chuck...

Days move in ages, and time in moments; sparrows live many days, but a song is gone in a moment of wonder. BEAUTIFUL poem Chuck.

This little gem is brief, but rich and enduring.

Your touch is as light as a feather here...well done.

Aren't we all just little sparrows and now with technology so cheap, we all, on 'Twitter' tweet, tweet, tweet..... but for this little sparrow, please, write more poems such as these; -) Ruthy (alias 'Little Sparrow' come read mine...please) : -) (oh gosh, I do hope you've heard of 'Twitter' it's this new internet site you see, where people write down their thoughts...otherwise you might think I'm completely out of my tree, heh heh)

Wonderful use of metaphor. The loveliness of your fleeting thought lingers in the mind. Warm regards, Sandra

this haiku looking seemingly innocous devouring depth of thought good work Chuck

I've always found sparrows to be rather insignificant little things, your poem brings them to life though. HG: -) xx

Very nice my dear...at what age did you first notice this? (smile) Dorothy

Time is too short, isn't it Chuck? But the bright side is that God will grant you a whole 24 hours tomorrow to compensate for the time missed yesterday. Beautifully expressed! Take care, Beth

Hey Charles: I agree with most of the below. But keep the time and the days, they do serve their purpose. You would be great at Haiku. Perhaps you are; I just have to read on. Adeline

Rewrite of a comment lost in transition from write to send: is not 'days' a subset of 'time', hence a redundancy? Just wondering why you felt it necessary - poem would be wonderful without it, but, an excellent short piece capturing the brief moment of a sparrow's song. Not even sure if I have ever heard one-nightingale and lark, yes-sparrow, hmmm don't really recall. In NYC we don't see many; nor in Floroda -maybe in the Carolinas or PA.

this sounds like a japanese tanka. sparrows' song another day passes as i sip coffee

You have a gift to capture so much and leave a lasting imprint with your economy of words. Warmest wishes, Justine

What a beautiful poem! You said so much with a few words. I especially liked the last two lines.

I like how you pack so much into a short poem, Charles. dan

I like the way you used spare words to convey a deep truth. Also, liking the use of the word 'fly' as it relates to both time and sparrows. Lovely. Thanks.