A Field Of Ash In The Dark Comments

Beautifully seductive dream. All best wishes to you.

My second in the reading of your poetry... your two for two. Nice one...

On second read, the color and feel have changed to slightly dark and forboding. As this is your daughter, hopefully, just a random dream and nothing more. Still, wonderful use of imagery and mystery.

And a beautiful dream it is! Wonderfully descriptive imagery here, Jim - almost magical. 'A lace wrapped wrath with golden hair' - I love this line, especially. Nice one! Linda :)

The title is intriguing. Beautiful descriptive images. Has a pleasant, wistful tone. A good poem.

To my daughter, my golden child. I love you.

I like the description you evoke in the beginning lines especially “A lace wrapped wraith with golden hair” and the comparison of the event with sleep, dream, mist, and forest. Well done.

the life and light that only one can feel about ones child they can only visit us in our dreams and that is where they stay as pure as the day they were born

This poem is amazing! i wish i could write something this amazing!

An unsettling poem, a haunting one, and, as most dreams are at times, frightening as well. One like this leaves one with a disturbed feeling all the next day. Beautifully crafted to show that feeling.

wow.......this is beautiful......perfect

After a second read and with the knowledge that the she is your daughter, I can see a totally different perspective on this taunting and haunting dream poem. We do subconciously worry for our children, it is entirely natural and your anguish is palpable here James. The field of Ash, is perhaps symbolic in the darkness? ! A good read, thanks for sharing. I do love the title, although ash is painful metaphor in my life. All the best, Tai

I like this a lot. It's short, but doesn't need anything else added.

A lace-wrapped wraith- dark unsettled sleep. These slow phrases read so so well Jim. You must be satisfied, even with you first rate command of imagery, with this beautifully appealing piece. Kind thoughts always - from Fay. 10+ + +