Saturday, May 2, 2009

A Fever Comments

Rating: 5.0

Suddenly in summer on a dusty path
a fever takes me, and I see your face
again in the sweltering heat of blue-draped mountains;
or under smoky skies that clutch my throat
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Raj Arumugam 13 May 2009

intense in its meaning and words, Rory...

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Lillian Thomas 08 May 2009

I really like this irregular sonnet, though I'm not sure that the repetition of 'red and black, red and black' serves your meaning or scansion at all. Other than that this poem has a passionate quality that overcomes any imperfections.

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you are symbolic my dear friend..you are enigmatic and always amazing! =)

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Wonderfully descriptive. We can find loved ones pretty much anywhere we look...if we take the time to see. My only suggestion is that capitalization and some punctuation would help guide the reader through your poem :)

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 03 May 2009

Beautiful poem. A recap of feverish love......An ecstasy of fire.......10/10.

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rago rago 02 May 2009

beautiful fever........ fever of love........ thank you for your kind sharing.

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Rory Hudson

Rory Hudson

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