Sunday, September 9, 2012

A Dead Possum And A Plucked Flower Comments

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A dead possum and a plucked flower
Lay side by side on the curb of my street
Its springtime, its daybreak
What is unnatural about this natural act?
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Bri Edwards 24 July 2013

i was drawn to this by the title; i guess that is often what happens! i was a bit surprised by what i found, but not disappointed. i feel there are several typos(?) in the poem, including here: ...I need to grief; I leave my faith at my doorsteps I will ignore its knocks.....i would suggest i need grief or i need to grieve. and does its knocks refer to the knocks of death? in the next two lines: I am in title to my sadness I am in tile to my madness i like rhyming, but i don't understand title or the similar tile. i especially like the last FIFTEEN lines. very nice! thanks for sharing.

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