Monday, May 17, 2010
A Day In The Park - A Haibun Comments
Rating: ★1.5
The foliage in the park is stunning. Cherry blossoms are blooming. Their smell radiates across the densely populated garden. Men, young and old are sitting on the dark green benches which have been newly refurbished, reflecting on the meaning of their lives, as they take in the splendid day that they are spending in this often desolate park.
Cherry blossoms bloom
Men sitting on park benches
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7/26/2025 11:34:01 AM # 1.0.0
“As they taken in” is confusing and does not seem to be grammatically correct. I think if you were to clean up this one disjointed line, the poem would be decent.