Friday, March 27, 2009

A Day In My Wife's Life Comments

Rating: 4.8

A bead in her eyes reflects
my restless years.
Her strained smile in lips
recalls her hopeful days.
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Putholi Arumugham T
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shakequill usher 22 March 2010

does she disapprove of your poems consuming of your time?

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Jessica Vera 18 February 2010

It's well written. really like the way you worded everything. ;)

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Kristina B; Williams 08 August 2009

a well written ode to a day in your wifes life, a unexpected sad twist at the ending

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Lady Grace 29 May 2009

this poem is expressive.altough sadness appears in ending..grace

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Mario Rios Pinot 12 May 2009

Nice powerful what can I do to help?

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Samah Elhawy 29 April 2009

wow what a great words its so nice i loved it keep it up thanks a lot for your care

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Johannes Yeboah 13 April 2009

Quite touchy and sad..read it 3 times to get the full meaning cos i thought the title of the poem didn't fit the poem but I think its gud. Would give an 8! !

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Kesav Easwaran 12 April 2009

liked this write for the sentiment and sensitiveness it displays...10

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Charlotte Andreski 11 April 2009

This is the mark of true poetry- writing from your heart. Great job! You might want to reformat the title, though, as Ency Bearis commented on. It will reflect your poem more clearly.

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Ency Bearis 11 April 2009

a very significant write...and well versed on poetic creativity....nice but something just to say how the title constructed...it shoud be A DAY IN MY WIFE'S LIFE - the apostrophe in S to make a singular if you want the plural meaning - (a lot of women) -should be WIVES

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Meggie Gultiano 01 April 2009

you are good! short, simple, sad but you let the readers cling for more.That's poetry for me.This is well penned.Thanks for the invite. Hugs, meggie

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I have to Agree with Wolfeman. this is very good writing.

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Greenwolfe 1962 28 March 2009

Yes. This was written with much depth and sorrow. Quite impressively I might add. There are a lot of writers who try to write this well, but don't. I was much impressed by the clarity of meaning and brevity of this piece. Please continue writing and expressing thoughts in this very concise way. GW62

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Christina Phan 28 March 2009

im srry its was gd nothing to fix just take my advice n write wht u want from ur heart i give u 9+

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