A bead in her eyes reflects
my restless years.
Her strained smile in lips
recalls her hopeful days.
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It's well written. really like the way you worded everything. ;)
a well written ode to a day in your wifes life, a unexpected sad twist at the ending
wow what a great words its so nice i loved it keep it up thanks a lot for your care
Quite touchy and sad..read it 3 times to get the full meaning cos i thought the title of the poem didn't fit the poem but I think its gud. Would give an 8! !
liked this write for the sentiment and sensitiveness it displays...10
This is the mark of true poetry- writing from your heart. Great job! You might want to reformat the title, though, as Ency Bearis commented on. It will reflect your poem more clearly.
a very significant write...and well versed on poetic creativity....nice but something just to say how the title constructed...it shoud be A DAY IN MY WIFE'S LIFE - the apostrophe in S to make a singular if you want the plural meaning - (a lot of women) -should be WIVES
you are good! short, simple, sad but you let the readers cling for more.That's poetry for me.This is well penned.Thanks for the invite. Hugs, meggie
I have to Agree with Wolfeman. this is very good writing.
Yes. This was written with much depth and sorrow. Quite impressively I might add. There are a lot of writers who try to write this well, but don't. I was much impressed by the clarity of meaning and brevity of this piece. Please continue writing and expressing thoughts in this very concise way. GW62
im srry its was gd nothing to fix just take my advice n write wht u want from ur heart i give u 9+
does she disapprove of your poems consuming of your time?