A Day I Wont Forget Comments

looks pretty good to me........the theme's good..........i guess sunshine is being too harsh........... i will advice you to check the spellings though..........coz u have quite a few spelling mistakes........and one more and important thing, i think you are forcing your poem to rhyme.....i will give you an example........ ''of happiness they come im excited some''' here some looks all out of place and seems like u have forced it so as to rhyme with come.........remember poetry is not about rhyme always......... All in all a good poem.............. ;)

this poem doesn't make sense to me at all